Honored at a reception in New York City in 1870, Red Cloud
delivers a strong message to his audience in "Indian
Rights." His speech is as important as Dr. King's
"I Have a Dream" speech, both arguing
for equal treatment.
In longer passages, the tone, audience, point of view and
purpose often vary throughout the piece. This is true of Red
Cloud's speech. When Red Cloud changes his audience, watch
for the change in his tone and purpose.
Read the prompt you will be answering, so that there is a place
in your brain to file away ideas as you read! Taking notes would
be an excellent idea! You might want to look for quotes to support
these areas:
Purpose - locate text to show when his purpose is:
to inform. What does he say?
to defend. What does he say?
to persuade. What does he say?
Audience - point of view and tone sections are marked
in the speech.
When he speaks about his audience, what is his tone?
When he speaks about the ways the government has wronged
his people, what is his tone?
When he speaks about the injuries done to his people and
of the Sioux's desire for peace and friendship, what is
his tone?
Extended Response Prompt:
From your notes, you know that Red Cloud's point of view and tone changed depending on his audience, who or what he was speaking about.
Choose one of the three statements below indicating an audience and tone. There is not one right answer. Your writing will be evaluated by the way you support the choice you make.
When Red Cloud spoke to his audience of people who had honored him at the reception in New York, his tone was gentle, polite, and peaceful.
When Red Cloud spoke of the government and how they wronged his people, his tone is angry, bitter and scornful.
When Red Cloud spoke of his own people, their injuries suffered and their desire for peace and friendship, his tone is proud, sorrowful and pleading.
Type the statement you choose as the introduction to your writing.
Then give three details from the passage to explain and support your choice.
Ready for writing a full four point answer?
Go for it!
Choose ONE of the following three
options for writing your response.
1.
If
Microsoft Word is available on your computer,
this document allows you to type your
answer, use spell check, save, copy/paste
text, and/or print the page to turn in. << Click here
to open a word form for your response.
2.
This
file can be printed, and allows you to
use your best penmanship (yes, real writing
instead of typing), and turn it in to
your teacher. << Click here
to open a .pdf file for your response.
3.
If you are a student taking
this class through IA, you will need to
use this document for your response. Follow
directions on your checklist to copy/paste
into an e-mail. << Click here for the text.
You've had experience at score an extended response now. Take
over! Score your own writing using this criteria:
4 - Extensive (top notch, bullseye!)
3 - Basic (good, middle of
target)
thoroughly (completely) analyzes the details in
the speech to show audience and tone
interpretation shows insight
ample (more than enough) relevant (makes sense)
examples from the passage to support ideas
analyzes the details in the speech to show audience and
tone
interpretations are thoughtful
sufficient (enough) examples from the passage to
support ideas
2 - Partial (needs practice,
outer edge of target)
1 - Minimal (try again, off
target)
partial analysis of the statement of audience and
tone
interpretations are simple or right on the surface
tries to use evidence from the passage to support ideas,
but they may not be relevant (may not make sense).
difficulty analyzing statement of audience and tone
may not include interpretation or may write "I don't
know."
little or no evidence from the passage included
I understand the scoring targets and I evaluated my writing
this way.
If you scored 3 or 4, print the Word
document for your teacher.
If you scored 1 or 2, figure out how to improve your
writing. What needs to be added to increase your score?. Sometimes
it really helps to discuss it with a parent, friend or your
teacher. Revise your Word doc, and then
when you are satisfied with it, rescore it and print for your
teacher!
What a lot of hard work! Let's finish up with the Self-Check.
